I'm only on the first chapter so far, but Iove this so much. The story is a interesting, the writing is chef's kiss. The prologue made me sob. I'm so angry at the situation, everytime someone opens their mouth I fanna swing at them. The injustice and frustration feels very real. 😭 but anyway shsh I know it's gonna be a great journey! (It's also my first interactive game, so thank you for setting the bar high!!)
Edit: Okay, I read the second chapter and all the characters are so good!! I can't choose which one I wanna interact with more!
i love this so muchhhhhhh, it was so full of emotions ahhh, good job and very well written! i wanted to ask tho, how many chapters will this have? and when will thhe next chapter come out_:D
I'm not sure when the next chapter will be out since I'm planning on adding more content to the current demo.
Since chapter 3 has another timeskip to when MC is 18-20, I decided on adding playable short stories that are set before it mainly because I want MC's relationships with the others to have more substance.
I want to include options for MC to have a childhood crush on either Hunter or Fadiya. Due to the timeskips it would feel rather out of nowhere if I didn't include some content in between the timeskips.
This is truly one of my most highly anticipated WIPs! The story begins with an absolutely heartbreaking event, and the author, Coeur, doesn’t skim over the resulting emotional devastation. The two available chapters (and prologue) focus on world building and developing an MC with intense emotions/motivations, while introducing the key ROs in a way that feels natural to the cadence of the story. It is a WIP, so there are some unpolished bits, but I am really looking forward to this IF’s development! The creator has a clear voice and a powerful story to tell, and I really think they have what it takes to make this one of the greats. <3
This is so sweet. Thank you for your kind words and for sharing your experience playing my IF! Your anticipation and attention mean the world to me. Your support is invaluable, and I'll strive to polish and enhance the experience even further. Thank you again for believing in the story I'm striving to tell. 💗
I truly love this whole game so far. I'm making my character not trusting anyone (expect for my queen fadiya <3). Maybe it's my trust issues seeping into the game LOL.
The play got me messed up. Should I regret burning the dead queen room? Most likely yes. But it was very satisfying. And future character can deal with actions and let present self have their moment.
After having the game recommended to me by a friend, I intended only to skim through it. However, upon reading it and discovering a fresh new chapter, I felt compelled to express my admiration to the author.
To begin, I find the premise of the story to be quite intriguing. Refreshingly, it avoids the common clichés found in many similar works. The level of mystery present from the outset is enough to engage the reader without overwhelming or confusing them.
The characters are well developed, and their interactions are both complex and diverse. Despite being only a 9-year-old, the young protagonist maintains the decorum and pettiness befitting of royalty. However, the occasional reminder of their youth leaves the reader with a nuanced and relatable character.
The overall writing style is poetic and eloquent, carrying the story along like a gentle breeze. It is easy to lose oneself in the world created by the author.
In short, I found this story to be highly enjoyable and believe that it has great potential. I eagerly anticipate further updates from the author and would like to offer my kudos for their excellent work. I also want to apologise for such a lengthy comment. I'm really passionate when it comes to expressing what I liked about this type of work and wanted to show my excitement. I will also have to admit my friend has friend has found a hidden gem. (If you see this, no, you didn't. lmaoo).
Woah, are you sure you're not a writer yourself? Thank you very much for your kind words 🥹🥹🥹 I hope I can continue delivering content worthy of your praise. 💗
The update was wonderful, I cried a few times and the characters are so wonderful :D (Lancelot as dad figure, I love that so much x3) and the RO's are amazing, thank you so much <3
This is really good! i really enjoyed playing it! tho i have run into a problem, i can't seem to write my own name? i couldn't in the character creator but, the problem comes mainly since i decided to stay with Hunter, Heilon and Vincent during the festival and i can't continue.. Any idea as to what i can do to fix this? XD
Hi! I'm glad you're enjoying it so far 🥰 When you click the box that says insert your own name, do you scroll down? Because you have to scroll down to see the box where you have to write it then click confirm name.
If you are on mobile, you could also try using desktop mode in your browser.
Lmao raise your hand if the hatred you feel for Luceris burns hotter than the fiery pits of hell~ I’m only half joking. If this man was dying of thirst and I had a glass of water, I would smile, look him in the eyes, and pour every last drop into the ground. Great story, exceptional writing. :)
But fr i love the setting and the way the mc’s past is set out, theres so much mystery surrounding Luceris’ past too and I cant wait to find out more about the whole cast. Its all just set perfectly❤️❤️
If i may offer stylistic adive: divide your long sentences into smaller ones to help with pacing for reading. F.e., you have sentences with 5-6 clauses, they easily can be split into 2-3 sentences.
Your worldbuilding is amazing. From the very beginning I felt sucked into the fighting of these two nations. I genuinely teared up with our parting with Alistair and Luceris's conversation with Helios. I am excited for the next chapter!
I love the premise and it's actually a really good story. It has so much potential, but most of the times I don't feel like I can control the MC at all. Pre-set personality is totally fine, but it feels like my choices didn't matter. Most of the times I wish my MC could say/do things differently. Giving more text flavour to MC's answear/action could make this IF even better! It would be a lot of code work tho, probably...?
I will give an example; when my MC talked with Luceris; I felt like the conversation was being forced to me, as a reader, and I have no control on how the conversation could go. I personally wish she could just ignore him and everyone instead (even Lancelot), I wish that's an option. I think the only option from that conversation was lash out/keep calm. Oh well, I wish I didn't talk with him in the first place. But, if talking with him is an absoultely important aspect for the plot line, I wish she could act in various way, one of it like just listen to his woe is me story and ignore him, merely because I don't wanna talk with my family's murderer lol
And start from there, I don't see much options either, no option on how we could act when we are being looked at, or when we were being called demon, etc. As for now the reader have little control on how the MC could act.
I know the current demo doesn't have a lot of options and it's mainly because I didn't want the personality at 9 years old to affect grown up MC's personality a lot later on so the options were mainly superficial.
I am currently working on chapter 2 and it has more choices regarding how MC acts so I hope you give it a chance!
A gripping game, I feel so bad for the main character. (and helois! oh my god, imagine his reaction when he figures out what his father did? would he be as angry and agree with the actions, or would it make him hate his father??? and with whats happpening at the end of chapter one.... that would horrify me if I was helios or mc! Im so so excited to find out! hes also so silly hes definitely my favourite <33) Honestly, ive been looking for my interactive fictions to get into, and this is just the one. Very excited to read more!
don't remember where nut you have the word "enoug" I think might be missing an 'h'.
and y'know just my preferences talking here but.. found the bit of railroading repeating text a little jarring in a way that wasn't my vibe. also a lot of dripping dialogue lol, why not have some sentences drip with this tone but have the next one laced with it's own and the NEXT honeyed in it's tone and etc etc 👀
Loving it so far and always thrilled to follow a rad newly discovered writer! Waiting with bated breath for more!
Thank you so much! I'm glad you were able to visualize things because of my writing, I've been trying to get better at describing locations to make players feel as if they're there so this means a lot to me. 💗
I'm so looking forward to this. Your writing is amazing and the story is soo interesting. I can't wait to this to continue (I already in love with some characters, they are so loveableee)
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I'm only on the first chapter so far, but Iove this so much. The story is a interesting, the writing is chef's kiss. The prologue made me sob. I'm so angry at the situation, everytime someone opens their mouth I fanna swing at them. The injustice and frustration feels very real. 😭 but anyway shsh I know it's gonna be a great journey! (It's also my first interactive game, so thank you for setting the bar high!!)
Edit: Okay, I read the second chapter and all the characters are so good!! I can't choose which one I wanna interact with more!
Aaaaa omg I'm so happy you enjoyed it! 😭 So honored that this IF is your first and that you had a good experience 🫶
i love this so muchhhhhhh, it was so full of emotions ahhh, good job and very well written! i wanted to ask tho, how many chapters will this have? and when will thhe next chapter come out_:D
Thank you so much! 💗
I'm not sure when the next chapter will be out since I'm planning on adding more content to the current demo.
Since chapter 3 has another timeskip to when MC is 18-20, I decided on adding playable short stories that are set before it mainly because I want MC's relationships with the others to have more substance.
I want to include options for MC to have a childhood crush on either Hunter or Fadiya. Due to the timeskips it would feel rather out of nowhere if I didn't include some content in between the timeskips.
Totally understandable, thank you for you time and keep up the good work!!
NEED MORE D:(
anyway the story so good! wishing for more interactions with Helios bc he is my cute lil patootie :3
Thank you so much! 💗
This is truly one of my most highly anticipated WIPs! The story begins with an absolutely heartbreaking event, and the author, Coeur, doesn’t skim over the resulting emotional devastation. The two available chapters (and prologue) focus on world building and developing an MC with intense emotions/motivations, while introducing the key ROs in a way that feels natural to the cadence of the story. It is a WIP, so there are some unpolished bits, but I am really looking forward to this IF’s development! The creator has a clear voice and a powerful story to tell, and I really think they have what it takes to make this one of the greats. <3
This is so sweet. Thank you for your kind words and for sharing your experience playing my IF! Your anticipation and attention mean the world to me. Your support is invaluable, and I'll strive to polish and enhance the experience even further. Thank you again for believing in the story I'm striving to tell. 💗
I truly love this whole game so far. I'm making my character not trusting anyone (expect for my queen fadiya <3). Maybe it's my trust issues seeping into the game LOL.
The play got me messed up. Should I regret burning the dead queen room? Most likely yes. But it was very satisfying. And future character can deal with actions and let present self have their moment.
Thank you so much 🥹🥹💗
This game had me up sobbing at 3 am </3
Mission accomplished 🥰
THIS WAS SO GOOD AHHHH I WANNA EAT IT I LOVED ITTTT
THANK YOUUU! Makes me very happy that you enjoyed it 💗
After having the game recommended to me by a friend, I intended only to skim through it. However, upon reading it and discovering a fresh new chapter, I felt compelled to express my admiration to the author.
To begin, I find the premise of the story to be quite intriguing. Refreshingly, it avoids the common clichés found in many similar works. The level of mystery present from the outset is enough to engage the reader without overwhelming or confusing them.
The characters are well developed, and their interactions are both complex and diverse. Despite being only a 9-year-old, the young protagonist maintains the decorum and pettiness befitting of royalty. However, the occasional reminder of their youth leaves the reader with a nuanced and relatable character.
The overall writing style is poetic and eloquent, carrying the story along like a gentle breeze. It is easy to lose oneself in the world created by the author.
In short, I found this story to be highly enjoyable and believe that it has great potential. I eagerly anticipate further updates from the author and would like to offer my kudos for their excellent work. I also want to apologise for such a lengthy comment. I'm really passionate when it comes to expressing what I liked about this type of work and wanted to show my excitement. I will also have to admit my friend has friend has found a hidden gem. (If you see this, no, you didn't. lmaoo).
Woah, are you sure you're not a writer yourself? Thank you very much for your kind words 🥹🥹🥹 I hope I can continue delivering content worthy of your praise. 💗
I just found this and omg im crying (／_;)/💕💕
I hope you enjoyed it! 💗
The update was wonderful, I cried a few times and the characters are so wonderful :D (Lancelot as dad figure, I love that so much x3) and the RO's are amazing, thank you so much <3
Thank you so much 🥹🥹 I'm so happy you enjoyed it!
Thanks for updating! Loved the update and Vincent <3
I'm so happy you enjoyed it! I love Vincent too 🫶
omg i meant Hunter but i wrote out the wrong name xD loved Vincent's part too <3 I am looking forward to see how all the dynamics develop :D
Thank you! 💗
Vincent <3 that is all. Lol no, I really love it so far :o and what an ending! I can't wait for chapter 3. This is one of my favourite IF games!
Thank you so much omg 🥹🥹 That's such high praise
This is really good! i really enjoyed playing it! tho i have run into a problem, i can't seem to write my own name? i couldn't in the character creator but, the problem comes mainly since i decided to stay with Hunter, Heilon and Vincent during the festival and i can't continue.. Any idea as to what i can do to fix this? XD
Hi! I'm glad you're enjoying it so far 🥰 When you click the box that says insert your own name, do you scroll down? Because you have to scroll down to see the box where you have to write it then click confirm name.
If you are on mobile, you could also try using desktop mode in your browser.
I love this story! Poor MC tho. :(
I personally blame the sister as much as Luceris. Gonna give her lil talk when I meet her.
I'm so happy you loved it! 💗 Unfortunately, this whole thing is a wild cycle of violence.
Oh my God!!!!!! It's back, I cannot believe it! Can't wait to play the second chapter. I'm sure it's as good as the previous one and the Prologue.
Let me know what you think after you play it! 🥰
Surely will do!
(I have finished the second chapter!)
The chapter was very dramatic and well written.
I already like how our MC has different options for dealing with the pain and lost.
The characters are charismatic in their own way and we genuinely feel what our MC feels. I'm very curious about the new update!
So many emotions in your writing, I love it. Can't wait for chapter 3. 5/5
Thank you so much! 💗
Lmao raise your hand if the hatred you feel for Luceris burns hotter than the fiery pits of hell~ I’m only half joking. If this man was dying of thirst and I had a glass of water, I would smile, look him in the eyes, and pour every last drop into the ground. Great story, exceptional writing. :)
Lmao 😭😭 Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it.💗
AHHHH YOU DID IT AGAIN IM HOOKED ONCE MOREEE
chapter 2 was so beautiful, your writing is beautiful, the characters are beautiful THANK YOU FOR THE FOOD
Aaaa thank you so much for your kind words 🥹🥹 I'm so happy that you enjoyed it!
AAAA I JUST LOVE YOUR WRITING SM!! Every moment is full of emotions for me, and i enjoy that sm!
But fr i love the setting and the way the mc’s past is set out, theres so much mystery surrounding Luceris’ past too and I cant wait to find out more about the whole cast. Its all just set perfectly❤️❤️
Thank you so much 🥹🥹 It makes me very happy that you like it!
If i may offer stylistic adive: divide your long sentences into smaller ones to help with pacing for reading. F.e., you have sentences with 5-6 clauses, they easily can be split into 2-3 sentences.
Thank you for the feedback!
First of all, great story.
Second of all, Luceris is a sick bastard and I'm going to kill him.
Thank you! 💗
is there a dark setting? The white ones suck the eyes right outta my head.
Hi, dark mode will be coming on the next update which is on the 28th!
This was a terrific story! The prologue and chapter 1 was great — can't wait for the next chapter (but take your time!) ⸜(*ˊᗜˋ*)⸝💛
Thank you so much! 💗 The next update comes on the 28th.
The story is so good! I love this, keep it up! <3
Thank you so much!
omg the things I’ll do to play this for the first time again,, this was beautiful!
Can’t wait for chapter 2, keep it up 👍 you’re absolutely amazing :DD
Thank you so much!
Please don't say that I'm the only one because every time I come here, I look at this IF and think, "Now that's what a masterpiece looks like" 😮💨✨.
I'm sorry, like mate?
You can't possibly not adore this 😭
That’s very sweet of you 😭😭💗 Thank you so much!
NO! Thank you so much for this IF ✨😭❤️
I loved the demo, you're a amazing writer and i really look forward to see where the story goes :)
Thank you! 💗
NO I NEED MORE
And what tha hell was that in the end i want to refuse >:(
Good game by the way
Ps: i wish i could just ignore or punch people when they talk about your familiy
Kinda like they are talking about your dead family you know and most of them are just rude so violence is tha wae
Thank you! 💗
Your worldbuilding is amazing. From the very beginning I felt sucked into the fighting of these two nations. I genuinely teared up with our parting with Alistair and Luceris's conversation with Helios. I am excited for the next chapter!
Thank you! 💗
I love the premise and it's actually a really good story. It has so much potential, but most of the times I don't feel like I can control the MC at all. Pre-set personality is totally fine, but it feels like my choices didn't matter. Most of the times I wish my MC could say/do things differently. Giving more text flavour to MC's answear/action could make this IF even better! It would be a lot of code work tho, probably...?
I will give an example; when my MC talked with Luceris; I felt like the conversation was being forced to me, as a reader, and I have no control on how the conversation could go. I personally wish she could just ignore him and everyone instead (even Lancelot), I wish that's an option. I think the only option from that conversation was lash out/keep calm. Oh well, I wish I didn't talk with him in the first place. But, if talking with him is an absoultely important aspect for the plot line, I wish she could act in various way, one of it like just listen to his woe is me story and ignore him, merely because I don't wanna talk with my family's murderer lol
And start from there, I don't see much options either, no option on how we could act when we are being looked at, or when we were being called demon, etc. As for now the reader have little control on how the MC could act.
Thank you! 💗
I know the current demo doesn't have a lot of options and it's mainly because I didn't want the personality at 9 years old to affect grown up MC's personality a lot later on so the options were mainly superficial.
I am currently working on chapter 2 and it has more choices regarding how MC acts so I hope you give it a chance!
Definitely! I'm interseted to see where the story will go. :)
A gripping game, I feel so bad for the main character. (and helois! oh my god, imagine his reaction when he figures out what his father did? would he be as angry and agree with the actions, or would it make him hate his father??? and with whats happpening at the end of chapter one.... that would horrify me if I was helios or mc! Im so so excited to find out! hes also so silly hes definitely my favourite <33) Honestly, ive been looking for my interactive fictions to get into, and this is just the one. Very excited to read more!
Thank you so much! 💗
Got me tearing up just during the prolog, can't wait for chapter 2 and more, already went ahead and followed ur tumblr and patreon.
Thank you so much! 💗 Your support made me really happy, I appreciate it. I hope you like the content available on patreon!
i loved reading this! you're really good at writing :)
(spoiler review-ish ahead?>>>>>>)
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the part where a nine year old marries an adult is...icky but it hasn't gotten to it yet so i'll hope for the best :0
Thank you! 💗
It's meant to be icky so I hope you feel icky when you get there haha
You're welcome! And oh that makes sense xD
Love this! Looking forward to upcoming chapters
Thank you!💗
first page of the prologue: "led eyes upon".
don't remember where nut you have the word "enoug" I think might be missing an 'h'.
and y'know just my preferences talking here but.. found the bit of
railroadingrepeating text a little jarring in a way that wasn't my vibe. also a lot of dripping dialogue lol, why not have some sentences drip with this tone but have the next one laced with it's own and the NEXT honeyed in it's tone and etc etc 👀Loving it so far and always thrilled to follow a rad newly discovered writer! Waiting with bated breath for more!
Hello, I'm glad you enjoyed it! 💗
"Led eyes upon" is actually correct grammar, I didn't mean for it to be "Laid eyes upon". I'll try to look for the missing h part haha 😂
Dripping dialogue was only used about 4 times in the demo but I went and saw that it was all towards the end so I understand why it felt like a lot.
I have a "report bugs" form on the pinned post on my tumblr blog, if you find anything else like typos then let me know! Thank you.
Huh, I would have thought it'd be lie eyes upon. MY BAD 😞
Is the story finished if not when is the next update :)?
The story is still in development, the next update is expected to be in April.
It’s official! I’m hooked! Your writing is amazing! The way you describe things really made me able to visualize it! I can’t wait for more <3
Thank you so much! I'm glad you were able to visualize things because of my writing, I've been trying to get better at describing locations to make players feel as if they're there so this means a lot to me. 💗
I'm so looking forward to this. Your writing is amazing and the story is soo interesting. I can't wait to this to continue (I already in love with some characters, they are so loveableee)
Thank you so much! 💗
Amazing story!! I really loved the plot! You are a amazing writer! I'm really looking forward to the next chapter! :)
Thank you so much! 💗