Crown of Ashes and Flames

Thanks for updating! Loved the update and Vincent <3

Vincent <3 that is all. Lol no, I really love it so far :o and what an ending! I can't wait for chapter 3. This is one of my favourite IF games! 

This is really good! i really enjoyed playing it! tho i have run into a problem, i can't seem to write my own name? i couldn't in the character creator but, the problem comes mainly since i decided to stay with Hunter, Heilon and Vincent during the festival and i can't continue.. Any idea as to what i can do to fix this? XD

I love this story! Poor MC tho. :(

I personally blame the sister as much as Luceris. Gonna give her lil talk when I meet her.

Oh my God!!!!!! It's back, I cannot believe it! Can't wait to play the second chapter. I'm sure it's as good as the previous one and the Prologue.

So many emotions in your writing, I love it. Can't wait for chapter 3. 5/5 

Lmao raise your hand if the hatred you feel for Luceris burns hotter than the fiery pits of hell~  I’m only half joking. If this man was dying of thirst and I had a glass of water, I would smile, look him in the eyes, and pour every last drop into the ground. Great story, exceptional writing. :)

AHHHH YOU DID IT AGAIN IM HOOKED ONCE MOREEE

chapter 2 was so beautiful, your writing is beautiful, the characters are beautiful THANK YOU FOR THE FOOD

AAAA I JUST LOVE YOUR WRITING SM!! Every moment is full of emotions for me, and i enjoy that sm!

If i may offer stylistic adive: divide your long sentences into smaller ones to help with pacing for reading. F.e., you have sentences with 5-6 clauses, they easily can be split into 2-3 sentences.

First of all, great story.

Second of all, Luceris is a sick bastard and I'm going to kill him.

is there a dark setting? The white ones suck the eyes right outta my head.

This was a terrific story! The prologue and chapter 1 was great — can't wait for the next chapter (but take your time!) ⸜(*ˊᗜˋ*)⸝💛

The story is so good! I love this, keep it up! <3

omg the things I’ll do to play this for the first time again,, this was beautiful!

Can’t wait for chapter 2, keep it up 👍 you’re absolutely amazing :DD

Please don't say that I'm the only one because every time I come here, I look at this IF and think, "Now that's what a masterpiece looks like" 😮‍💨✨.

I'm sorry, like mate? 

You can't possibly not adore this 😭

I loved the demo, you're a amazing writer and i really look forward to see where the story goes :)

NO I NEED MORE

And what tha hell was that in the end i want to refuse >:(

Good game by the way

Ps: i wish i could just ignore or punch people when they talk about your familiy

Kinda like they are talking about your dead family you know and most of them are just rude so violence is tha wae 

Your worldbuilding is amazing. From the very beginning I felt sucked into the fighting of these two nations. I genuinely teared up with our parting with Alistair and Luceris's conversation with Helios. I am excited for the next chapter!

I love the premise and it's actually a really good story. It has so much potential, but most of the times I don't feel like I can control the MC at all. Pre-set personality is totally fine, but it feels like my choices didn't matter. Most of the times I wish my MC could say/do things differently. Giving more text flavour to MC's answear/action could make this IF even better! It would be a lot of code work tho, probably...?

I will give an example; when my MC talked with Luceris; I felt like the conversation was being forced to me, as a reader, and I have no control on how the conversation could go. I personally wish she could just ignore him and everyone instead (even Lancelot), I wish that's an option. I think the only option from that conversation was lash out/keep calm. Oh well, I wish I didn't talk with him in the first place. But, if talking with him is an absoultely important aspect for the plot line, I wish she could act in various way, one of it like just listen to his woe is me story and ignore him, merely because I don't wanna talk with my family's murderer lol

And start from there, I don't see much options either, no option on how we could act when we are being looked at, or when we were being called demon, etc. As for now the reader have little control on how the MC could act.

A gripping game, I feel so bad for the main character. (and helois! oh my god, imagine his reaction when he figures out what his father did? would he be as angry and agree with the actions, or would it make him hate his father??? and with whats happpening at the end of chapter one.... that would horrify me if I was helios or mc! Im so so excited to find out! hes also so silly hes definitely my favourite <33) Honestly, ive been looking for my interactive fictions to get into, and this is just the one. Very excited to read more!

Got me tearing up just during the prolog, can't wait for chapter 2 and more, already went ahead and followed ur tumblr and patreon.

i loved reading this! you're really good at writing :)

(spoiler review-ish ahead?>>>>>>)

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the part where a nine year old marries an adult is...icky but it hasn't gotten to it yet so i'll hope for the best :0

Love this! Looking forward to upcoming chapters

first page of the prologue: "led eyes upon".

don't remember where nut you have the word "enoug" I think might be missing an 'h'.

and y'know just my preferences talking here but.. found the bit of railroading repeating text a little jarring in a way that wasn't my vibe. also a lot of dripping dialogue lol, why not have some sentences drip with this tone but have the next one laced with it's own and the NEXT honeyed in it's tone and etc etc 👀

Loving it so far and always thrilled to follow a rad newly discovered writer! Waiting with bated breath for more!

Is the story finished if not when is the next update :)?

It’s official! I’m hooked! Your writing is amazing! The way you describe things really made me able to visualize it! I can’t wait for more <3

I'm so looking forward to this. Your writing is amazing and the story is soo interesting. I can't wait to this to continue (I already in love with some characters, they are so loveableee)

Amazing story!! I really loved the plot! You are a amazing writer!  I'm really looking forward to the next chapter! :)

This is so good!! Just one little thing to point out:

[SPOILER WARNING]

MC finds his parent's room and runs into the king who has killed them. I chose the option where he finds a sword and stands up to the king stating that he has killed his family. Once Lancelot steps in and saves him, MC asks him if his parent's death is like an illness and if they will stop being dead at some point.

[END SPOILER WARNING]

I find this naivety weird because MC just pointed out that they lost people to killing implying they understand the concept of death. I recommend changing this if they are intended to be naive (which is understandable since they are a young child at this point in time).

my love for your story and intriguing characters? frikkin wild.

haha cannot wait to see what you write up next <3

ohhhh man. so much to dissect with these characters. >:) luceris especially. really really looking forward to more of this!! 

There is nothing greater than a flawless fantasy-infused revenge tale ✨. The more I read it, the better it gets!

What does it mean there are no valid storage adapters? It's not letting me play despite using Google chrome

Why do I always find games this good before they are fully released :c Pls, don't ever quit writing this story. I will simlpy not survive if you do.

This was amazing! I'm so ready for the next chapter. Absoultely captivating, I was so sad when I got to the end.

Wowe! This is so good! I love it <333

Wow, that was so interesting and captivating. 

The characters are very layered and the situation the MC's in makes us really engage against all the injustice inflicted by the King. 

Also, seeing the main characters having their own opinions and visions is great. I like the writing and the UI is good. 

Maybe a dark version would be easier on the eyes since I have high eye light sensitivity, although I'll definitely keep my eyes on this IF's next updates as I really like the idea behind it!

For what's here already I really enjoyed it. There are some moments where emotions are forced on you a little though. I get that Lancelot is meant to be a sympathetic figure in an otherwise hostile environment, but I feel that my character warms up to him far too quickly, especially given all my choices up to that point had been either silence or outright hostility. The kitchen scene seems especially chummy given that my character still sees him as an enemy.